503 - Pre-production 3 - Initial Storyboard Feedback

We spent this call going through Kahenya's first storyboard draft. Here's the feedack I gave:

• Everything needs to be slowed down a lot
• Cut to title sequence with the towel just about to come off was a very good edit
• The girl shouldn't have headphones when she cooks
• During the bus scene, the creep could duck as if he was flinching in reaction to the girl turning and flagging the bus down.
• Ceylin said the bus could be a red double decker
• The binoculars shouldn't be there in the street scenes
• The angle of the shot where the creep is on the girl's balcony should be at more of an acute angle, to cut off the door. This would mean that the girl can walk out the frame and the sound can show her leaving the apartment. It also makes it creepier and shows the Creep to be acting more sneaky
• The wardrobe slits should be closer together so we can't see through them
• Add some cloaks in the FG of the wardrobe
• The door should open outwards, with the hinge on the right side. This would mean that as it opens, it reveals the blood smear on the floor before showing the girl

We also discussed the sequence of events of the girl at the end, settling on these:

1. She's kneeling over the dead body, slashing away at it
2. She slows down, coming to a stop
3. She then dips her finger in one of the gashes, and dramatically brings it up to her mouth and licks it
4. She stands up using just her legs, with her arms limp at her sides
5. She visibly slows her breathing down, calming and composing herself
6. There is a beat after she is calm
7. Then she turns to us

I recorded a reference for this, focusing on how I imagined the licking and standing up to look like (timing not accurate):

The next steps are for Kahenya to add the changes we made, and then I asked him to send me the storyboard pro file for me to polish and edit together into an animatic with the right timings and some scratch sounds.