This is the first draft of my pitch bible (and thus there are a lot of aspects missing). The presentation of this went quite well, as I managed to explain my world, story and characters in quite a lot of depth while speaking failry fluently. The feedback I got from the presentation:
- I had strong character designs
- I had a strong idea of the world and general setting
- My storyboard was clear
- In Beram's 3/4 turn, he has two right feet which I need to fix
- The designs and silhouettes are very strong
- The story feels like 1-2 minutes long, so during the animatic phase I may need to do some editing to make it shorter, possible cutting out some scenes
- To help make the flashbacks clear, they could be colour gaded differently - maybe greyscale or sepia
- The daisy crossfade transition was liked
Obviously I have a lot to do to complete this, and to flesh it out. I also need to present a cleaner version of the storyboards rather than the scan of my sketchbook thumbnails.
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